Monster
30 04 2008I wake up
Gaze into the mirror
I see
A big brown hairy monster
Sitting on my head.
Still staring at the monster
I reach for my blue hair brush.
It only takes
30 seconds to kill
The big
Brown monster
On my
Head.
By Amber
Dear Amber,
Great peom! I love how you call your messy hair a big brown monster and how you kill it with a brush. My hair always looks like a monster when I wake up! Very descriptive! Keep up the good work!
Megan
Dear Amber,
I loved your poem. It was funny how you described bad hair as a big brown monster on your head, and how you killed it in only 30 seconds with a brush. Nice simile. Great gob, and keep up the good writing
oops, sorry, I meant good JOB, and by the way, I’m PiRsquared
Dear Amber,
HAHAHA!!!! I like this poem a lot…. I’m guessing you’re talking about a knot in your hair when you wake up in the morning. That happens to me ALL that time! I hope to see more poems from you, i bet thay’ll be really good!
-JDluver <333
oops! haha, I meant to say i bet THEY’LL be really good. Anyways… great poem!!!
Dear Amber,
I loved you poem. I thought it was great at the same time amusing!!! I loved how you referred to you messy hair as a monster. I also enjoyed how you came up with such a topic. Sometimes I read a poem, and don’t get me wrong it’s fabulous, but I always choose to comment the ones that not everyone would think of and your poem had just that. Finally I loved how you told me what the monster was “A big brown hairy monster” and you killed it “I reach for my blue hair brush.
It only takes
30 seconds to kill”. You used great creativity!!! Keep up the good work!!! Hope to here from you again.
Sincerely tinkerbell