School
30 04 2008School is like jail,
Imprisoned all day,
We work and work and work,
With no time to play.
School is like jail,
With horrible food,
With slop for lunch,
Just get me out dude!
School is like jail,
We’re so happy to go,
We can finally play,
With no teachers to say no.
By Matt
Dear Matt,
This is a good poem, its very true. You did a good job of repeating “School is like jail” over every stanza. You you should talk about the classes or teachers more though. You used good word choice and did good to back up your opinion.
Sincerely LAXkid
Dear Matt,
I think just about everything you said was a good eddited version of how I would put it. The only thing different for me is that the food is great. Otherwise your poem used good word choice and had a good flow to it. Keep up the good work, I hope to see more soon.
Sincerly,
Aimilis2010
Matt,
Mrs. Farnum
This poem is fun. Obviously school isn’t that bad for you; you’ve obviously learned a lot from your Language Arts teacher.
I can totally relate to how you feel, but you are obviously getting a lot from school, because you are a wonderful poet. Keep Writing
Sincerely, Dakota 6-1
Dear Matt,
This poem pretty much expresses everything that is true about school. Even though school may be exactly like that I did learn about repetition there. You used repetition very well in your poem. It rocks!
-Tater-tot
Dear Matt,
I like how you described how school is like prison, but in the second and third paragraph you seemed desperate to rhyme and it didn’t flow well.
-PiRsquared
i feel the same way school is jail and there is no good and no time to play except for gym you can play for a little but its not fun here cause we have to dress in to diffent clothes.
Dear Matt,
Great poem! Poems give an opinion and I definitely thing your opinion gets across to the reader. I liked the rhyming in the poem. I especially liked the stanza,”School is like jail,
We’re so happy to go,
We can finally play,
With no teachers to say no.” It makes me get excited about summer vacation. But your poem technique was great too.
-sftblluva3/SMS 3
Dear Matt,
Your poem school was great. It speaks out for almost every kid around the world. The big connection of school to jail was funny, because or class jokes about stuff like that all of the time. When you call the food slop, it makes me laugh because school food is disgusting. The only thing I would change is on the last line you said ” With no teachers to say no”, I recommend you change “with no” to without. Fantastic job
Dman695, Scarborough Middle School 2, 6/2/08
Dear matt,
In this poem I believe that you did an outstanding job by expressing how you feel about school. My favorite line that you created into this poem was “With no teachers to say no.” I liked this line because it gave a great rhyme to the line before saying “We’re so happy to go” another thing I enjoyed about “School” was how in the beginning of each stanza you said “School is like jail” so to me it gave a consistent thought that you thought that you didn’t enjoy school, haha I am sure that is what your readers got to, and possibly because at this time of the year we all fell the same way, so thank you for taking the words out of our mouth for us hehe.
Keep writing!!!!!!!
~kbug~sms1~6/5/08