Nature
29 04 2008Snow
White
Magical
Mystery
Flakes crisp and cold
Clovers
Green and lucky
Fresh as
Spring
Waves crash
Into the grainy sand
Filled with colorful fish
Sun
Bright and sunny
Full of brightness
Trees
Swing and sway with oxygen
Life is golden.
By Courtney
Dear best friend Courtney, I like your peom about nature. It’s a really cool poem. Good job!!!
This is a very good, poem and I really liked how you described each of the leaves and how they make you feel. i really like how you wrote “Life is golden.” that really makes you think. i think that you should have wrote how the sun, and the trees make you feel. Other then that it was an excellent poem.
Courtney,
Mrs. Farnum
Your poem proves that short & sweet lines/ words can be just as powerful as long descriptions. The word choice and use of white space in the poem reminds me a lot of the book Love That Dog by Sharon Creech. Have you read it? Good job!
i really liked how you said what you were describing before you actually described and i loved that last line “Life is golden” i tought it percfectly blended in with you poem and it summarized it all very well
Dear Courtney,
I really like the poem! The descriptions are all spot on. You can just see the snow falling, the waves crashing against the shore, and the clovers hiding amongst the grass. It is really pretty!
-Tater-tot
St. Johns School 6-1
Dear Courtney,
Three things I enjoyed about “Nature” were your word choice for example “Flakes crisp and cold” the connections between your stanzas and the way you would say a part of nature and then describe each part of nature in stanza form!
Great job
This was the whole package!!!!!!!
~kbug~5/15/08~SMS1~