RC Night
Beep Beep Beep
I wait forthe pause
Beep
we take off.
It is an obstacle course at first
There is striaght away
Then there is a trun
I make a circle.
There is a smaller straight away.
I feels very good
It gets my adrenaline pumping.
Just me and my dad
I think I am going to loose
Actually I know I will loose
Because
He Has a sytem that I can’t beat.
He gets in the top five all the time!
-Dakota
April 28th, 2008 at 7:15 pm
You used very good word choices and you put your line breaks in at good places.
May 13th, 2008 at 12:08 pm
I liked you poem it reminded me of my cousin when his father took him some where like that.
May 13th, 2008 at 1:08 pm
Austin Mougin
I like your RC Poem i knew you would do something with racing that is your favorite thing to do.
May 13th, 2008 at 2:07 pm
Hey I like your poem cause I race RC cars with you. I knew you would writ something like this cause I know you like to do that. I like how you make your poem sound so serious cause RC races aren’t that serious.
May 13th, 2008 at 2:15 pm
I liked the part when you get the adrellin rush
May 13th, 2008 at 2:59 pm
It reminds me of when I went to a race with my friend.
I like the words you used, and your stanza and line breaks!
=)*smiles*(=
May 13th, 2008 at 3:12 pm
Hey man i like our poem its so real realistic.
May 15th, 2008 at 1:17 pm
Sorry your dad always wins, but I bet he cant write a better poem!