Dream,Just A Dream
It is time for me to calm down.
I had to make this for the game.
I just tied it up,
52-52.
With 2.5 seconds left.
I did my three dibbles,
And then two more.
I glared at the front of the rim.
The black box behind it.
That’s were I will aim.
Then I looked at my coaches,
My team,
And my family.
I dribbled one more time,
And shot.
The ball sailed throw the air.
It was dead on.
I closed my eyes,
And opened my ears.
Then I heard a swish.
I heard my team yell and scream,
my name.
Tyler,Tyler,Tyler.
I won the the game.
I lifted the trophy over my head.
Tyler it is time to wake up now.
It was a Dream,Just A Dream.
For now.
-Tyler K.
May 15th, 2008 at 11:08 am
i like how you say ‘ok time for me 2 calm down’ it makes me think that your in a situation where your anxious or nervous. It makes me want to read om just to find out why your trying to calm yourself.
May 15th, 2008 at 11:10 am
Did you win? I love the second to last stanza, it seems your in a dream almost!
May 15th, 2008 at 11:11 am
I like how it says the ball sailed throw the air that is a great simile.
-Kelsey Schwarting
May 15th, 2008 at 11:11 am
I like your lines; especially in the part were you are looking at the people, and I like how you used the ball sails through the air in your poem too.
May 15th, 2008 at 11:24 am
We like the title and drama.
May 15th, 2008 at 12:26 pm
Good job. Do you like basketball? And are you good at it? Nice poem good detail.
May 15th, 2008 at 12:27 pm
That was a really good poem. I bet B-ball is your favorit sport. Are you really that good at it?!?
May 15th, 2008 at 1:14 pm
Wow. Sometimes even you creep me out, Ty. Wouldn’t it be great if that happened in real life.
May 15th, 2008 at 1:20 pm
I like your poem. I really liked it when you looked at you family and other people.
May 15th, 2008 at 1:31 pm
I love it when its the last few sec.. then they shoot and win the game! You really explained the action in the poem. GOOD JOB