Summer Days
As I walk out the door,
I smell the summer air.
Mulberry essence fills the air,
with delight.
As I walk down the hill,
I feel the grass poke-up
between my toes.
As the rain settles in,
I know
it’s goingto be
a perfect day.
-Jerry Q
May 13th, 2008 at 3:27 pm
I love your imagery in this poem. It is a great line when you talk about “mulberry essence”.
May 13th, 2008 at 8:11 pm
I like the part about the grass…I hate shoes. I run on gravel! On a hot day, the grass is always cold so…good job!
May 15th, 2008 at 11:12 am
I like your poem, because it makes me think I’m there and the power of your words just shock me and the same with the poem it gets me thinking of that kind of day and it makes me wonder if thare is going to be a day like the one you told me in your poem. Over all out standing poem.
May 15th, 2008 at 12:22 pm
I like the poem and how you describe the grass between your toes and what you smell good job!
May 15th, 2008 at 12:55 pm
I really like the second stanza! It was strong!
Great poem!
=)*smilie*(=
May 15th, 2008 at 1:17 pm
Great poem! I love the way you worded it, it makes the poem more real!
May 15th, 2008 at 1:19 pm
Great poem Jerry! the way you worded it made the poem so much more realistic!
May 15th, 2008 at 1:25 pm
I like summer since we had a horrible winter I just can’t wait, but if the winter was really bad I wont be surprised if we have a really bad summer too.
p.s. Great poem it goes great now that its so close to summer break.
May 15th, 2008 at 1:37 pm
I like how you described the grass in your toes!
What I like the best about it is the summer air. That is my favorite summer smell. Nice poem!