YUM!

May 22nd, 2009

YUM!
I am a delicious snack
Eaten for dessert
My circular shape
My chocolate chunks
My wonderful smell
Warm out of the oven
I am a delicious snack

Tom SMSP


7 Responses to “YUM!”

  1. Logankid2k7(logan middle school on May 27, 2009 9:32 am

    Dear Tom

    I liked your poem. its fun to guess about wat it is. are you talking about a chocolate chip cookie

  2. Caprisun on May 27, 2009 10:24 am

    Dear Tom,
    I’m pretty sure those are cookies, and they seem delicious! I llove your good description too. Keep up the good work!

    -Caprisun
    SMS-T
    May 27, 2009

  3. Anonymous on May 28, 2009 7:39 am

    Dear TOM,

    Nice riddle poem! I loved the way you used descriptive words to convey the mystery object you chose. Keep up the descriptive writing!

    OMGPONIEZ SMSP

  4. Cam Da Man on May 28, 2009 7:51 am

    Dear Tom I love you poem because it makes me feel hungry and want to eat something. It also has a great rhythm to it

    Sincerely Cam Da Man

  5. Bippty pop 4ever on May 28, 2009 7:59 am

    Dear Tom,

    I really liked your poem it was short and sweet. It kinda of made sense but you should let it make sense. I think it was a wonderful poem I like the part “I am delicious snack.”

    bippty pop 4ever
    smst
    5/28/09

  6. Guineveve on June 4, 2009 7:52 pm

    Dear Tom,
    I really enjoyed your poem “YUM!” I thought it was great how you chose to use something that people know about for this poem. I could read it and even though you never said it was a cookie i can tell it is, beacuse of how you described it. Your line, “my circular shape” was probably the first line that gave it away to me as to what you were talking about. Nice job!
    -Guineveve-sms-perron

  7. R6b56100 on June 11, 2009 11:02 am

    Dear Tom,
    I really enjoyerd reading your poem “YUM!” it really gave me a picture in my mind, and you desribe cookeis very well, and in a sly way so people could guess it. I like how you repeat “I am a delcious snack” Over all great poem….. Keep Writing :)
    -R6b56100

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